tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29751211.post116501375318511089..comments2023-10-14T05:20:11.308+00:00Comments on Bob Lock: The Dam Across The StarsBob Lockhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03141837277102776901noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29751211.post-1168527568227459142007-01-11T14:59:00.000+00:002007-01-11T14:59:00.000+00:00I know the feeling Bob, I've got quite a few start...I know the feeling Bob, I've got quite a few started-but-as-yet-unfinished short stories that I tell myself I'll finish in the near future.<BR/><BR/>I must admit, the first chapter reminded me alot of Pandora's Star by Peter F Hamilton and because of the viewpoint you used it got me really interested to read more. A dam good hook of a first chapter(sorry, couldn't resist the pun!).<BR/><BR/>All the best<BR/>MarkAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29751211.post-1168524556263027272007-01-11T14:09:00.000+00:002007-01-11T14:09:00.000+00:00Hiyahs Mark,Thanks for the feedback!Yep, you're ri...Hiyahs Mark,<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the feedback!<BR/><BR/>Yep, you're right that doesn't add up at all :) I'll make a note of that and ammend it to something more sensible like decades etc. Glad you liked the first draft and the opening chapters, I'm still working on it but making slow headway at the moment. I get all too easily distracted by non-writing things!<BR/><BR/>Best wishes,<BR/>BobBob Lockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03141837277102776901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29751211.post-1168521564133746542007-01-11T13:19:00.000+00:002007-01-11T13:19:00.000+00:00Hi BobJust had a read of this a like it a lot. I ...Hi Bob<BR/><BR/>Just had a read of this a like it a lot. I hope you do work at it some more, the foundation is there for a very good and entertaining story!<BR/><BR/>I do have one comment about it: what you say in the first chapter about the expansion going on for millenia and then starting the story in 2093 at the dam doesn't quite add up - is this just me being dim?<BR/><BR/>Anyway, apart from that it's a great read!!<BR/><BR/>All the best with the rest of it and I look forward to reading the finished product :)<BR/><BR/>MarkAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com